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Hawkheir

by Reabault

4.7

7 Ratings

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Evaliline is a Lusaan and young mother, after a great rebellion she is the only survivor of her company, who personally followed the rebel leader, and lives with the father of her child, Mark Lancefield, an Ursaan and the only survivor of the company that put an end to the rebellion. Emotionally trapped in a village that has no love for her or her kind she is forced to put her past behind her at last in order to protect her fellow survivors and the children they damned.

7 Ratings


promethium-14321 2017-05-19 18:19


angeljuarez5679118 2016-11-18 18:43


Pyro_Lily 2016-04-28 06:51

Dialogue needs some work. Can be confusing and a little disjointed but I can still follow. Otherwise an interesting story I'll continue to read. Don't compromise your style. It's your own and distinguishable and may benefit you as you move forward. But I'm not a professional editor or the like just an avid reader of the manga genre. So take what I say with a grain of salt, and in the end what makes you feel proud. Keep it up! A lot of potential.


Tanisha 2016-04-02 06:28


Michał Tubis 2016-03-23 09:55


Kura 2016-03-05 20:54


POP 2016-03-05 05:35


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